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Whenever you receive such a graph, close the exam paper and slowly leave the exam room.
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Explanation:
If you are aiming for a higher score, you should avoid writing paragraphs like this.
The problem is the paragraph is not easily readable because the writer starts each sentence with a cohesive device like ‘on one hand’, ‘firstly’, ‘for example’, ‘apart from this’. This reduces your COHERENCE AND COHESION score to 5-6.
Imagine driving a car on a bumpy road with a lot of potholes . You can reach your destination but the journey won’t be smooth. Reading this paragraph gives the same feeling.
While it is alright to use such linking words, you shouldn’t use them in each sentence. There are much better ways to connect your sentences and ideas. And the way you connect them shouldn’t attract any attention.
I’ll just send the improved version
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The last three essays I have shared have a lot in common because I wrote them with three different pre-ielts groups.
Essay 1
Essay 2
Essay 3
If you analyze these, you will understand how to write an essay on ‘do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages’ essay as all of them use the same approach/words/grammar.
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International tourism has brought enormous benefits to many places. At the same time, there is concern about its impact on local inhabitants and the environment.
Do the advantages of international tourism outweigh the disadvantages?
Many countries benefit from international tourism yet it can also cause a number of problems to the locals and environment. While there are several drawbacks to international tourism, they are outweighed by the advantages.
One concern over international tourism is it can lead to overcrowding. When there is an increased influx of tourists to an area, this can create problems such as noise pollution and traffic congestions. These issues can have an impact on the quality of life for local residents. Air pollution is another problem associated with international tourism. This is because the most popular means of transport is planes due to their convenience and speed and this type of transport runs on fossil fuels and emits toxic gases into to the air. This can contribute to climate change.
In my opinion, however, the benefits of global tourism are more significant. One major advantage is that it creates employment opportunities. For example, if a place attracts tourists, there will be a need for service industry, such as hotels and restaurants. This opportunity can allow people to generate regular incomes. Moreover, tourism can lead to cultural exchange. When people learn about each other’s cultural values, this can promote mutual understanding and respect between nations. This can lead to a more harmonious world.
In conclusion, there are several downsides to international tourism, such as its negative impacts on the quality of life for local inhabitants and climate change. However, they are not as significant as the upsides, which include the creation of jobs and exchange of culture.
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#essay
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This essay will probably get 7.5
Task Response - 7.0
Coherence and Cohesion - 8.0
Lexical resource - 7.0
Grammatical Range and Accuracy - 8.0
I wrote this with my PRE-IELTS group and so I tried to simplify it as much as I could.
There is a lot you can learn from the essay, especially in terms of Coherence and Cohesion. Pay attention to how I connected my sentences and ideas.
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There are several advantages to using the internet for children. One is that the internet provides easy access to information and learning opportunities. Languages and coding can serve as notable examples. The chance to connect with others is another benefit. Children can use apps such as Instagram and Telegram to keep in touch with others and this can improve their social skills.
Note that I used other ways of connecting sentences and ideas such as referencing and substitution.
A very important lesson!
On one hand, there are several advantages to using the internet for children. Firstly, the internet provides easy access to information learning opportunities. For example, children can learn different skills such as languages and coding. Apart from this, children can stay connected with their friends. In other words, they can use apps such as Instagram and Telegram to keep in touch with others. As a result, they can improve their social skills.
What is wrong with this paragraph?
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The way children spend their free time has been changed by technology.
Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?
Today children spend their leisure time differently due to technology. While there are some benefits to this, they are outweighed by the drawbacks.
One advantage of children using technology in their free time is it provides access to information. When children use the internet, for example, they can learn several skills, which are not typically covered in schools. Coding, languages, and content creation can be notable examples. Improved computer skills can be another benefit. When children actively use computers and the internet, they can learn how to use search engines, fast typing, and working with files. These skills can come in handy in the future.
In my opinion, however, the downsides of using technology are greater. One major disadvantage is it can lead to health problems. Children who frequently use technology such as phones and computers may suffer from eyesight deterioration. Also, these devices can lead to sedentary lifestyle, which may result in overweightness. Addiction to technology is an even bigger problem. If children become addicted to technology, this may distract them from more important tasks, such as doing homework and exercise. This may affect the overall development of children.
In conclusion, there are some positives associated with using technology in children’s free time, such as access to information and change to improve their computer skills. However, these are not as significant as the negatives, which include health-related issues and addiction.
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#essay
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What did you learn from the essay?
These questions will help you get a 7+ in writing task 2:
Task Response: how correctly did I answer the question? How well did I develop my ideas? Did I cover all parts of the task?
Coherence and Cohesion: Did I use paragraphs correctly? How well did I connect my ideas and sentence?
Lexical resource(vocabulary): Did I use the correct words and collocations? Did I avoid spelling errors? Did I avoid strange idioms?
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Did I use grammar correctly? Did I use different sentence structures(different tenses, modal verbs, passive voice, compound and complex sentences)
I will expand on each of these in different posts
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The essay can get 7.5
I believe it lacks the sophistication required for a higher score.
But Coherence and Cohesion can easily get 8-9. So, learn and copy
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Another band 7 essay is on the way. I’ll have another pre-ielts(almost ielts) lesson at 16.15 and so we’ll write another essay.
Which question would you like us to cover? Leave them in the comments. Only real exam questions, please
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In the past, people stored knowledge in books. Nowadays, people store knowledge on the internet.
Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?
Several decades ago, knowledge was mainly stored in books but today people rely on the internet to store information. While there are some drawbacks to this, they are outweighed by the benefits.
One disadvantage of storing books and information online is there is a risk of viruses. If a book or file is affected with a virus, it will be difficult or impossible to use it. This can not only prevent people from gaining important knowledge but it can also create problems for people’s devices. Reliability is another issue. By this I mean, information stored online can be easily changed and this can lead to misinformation. One notable example is Wikipedia – a website that provides a huge source of information. This website allows its users to edit information and as a result of this, there is a great deal of false information.
In my opinion, however, the positives of storing information and knowledge on the internet are more significant. One major advantage is information becomes more accessible. This means that anyone with the internet access can use a countless number of books, which is not possible with traditional physical books. Another convenience of storing knowledge online is there will no limit to how many books or how much information people can use. While people seek knowledge in conventional ways , such as by visiting libraries and reading newspapers and magazines, it is not always possible to find what they search. However, using the internet can help people to access any information they want.
In conclusion, there are some downsides to storing knowledge online, such as the risk of viruses and reliability issues. However, these are not as significant as the advantages, which include easy and unlimited access to information.
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