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What contributes to a person’s success and achievements has been a topic of many discussions and some attribute it to luck. While luck has its fair-share contribution to what people can achieve, other factors such as a person’s financial background and persistence play a much bigger role.
Accidental success and achievements have occurred frequently throughout history. In other words, there are instances where individuals unintentionally accomplish something significant by being in the right place at the right time. The discovery of North America by Christopher Columbus serves as a notable example. Despite intending to sail to India, Columbus accidentally arrived in America. Nevertheless, this achievement is celebrated, and Columbus is praised as the first person to explore the other side of the Atlantic.
In my opinion, however, attributing most success stories to luck appears to be simplistic as there are more important factors at play. One is a person’s financial background. People who are born into affluent families are better positioned to achieve success than those from financially disadvantaged backgrounds. This advantage stems from the easy access to education and networking opportunities that wealthy individuals typically have, which greatly increases their likelihood of succeeding in various aspects of life.
Persistence is another important element. Those who possess this trait often work tirelessly towards their goals even when they are faced with obstacles and setbacks. By contrast, people who easily give in hardly achieve success. Take J.K Rowling – the author of the much-loved series of Harry Potter. Despite being rejected by twelve publishers, she persisted in her efforts, which eventually led to her well-deserved success and fame.
In conclusion, I acknowledge that people’s achievements can be due to good fortune. However, I believe the main drivers behind the success of many people are not luck but rather financial security and persistence.
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The process by which smoked fish is produced can be outlined in a number of consecutive steps. The process can be broken down into four main stages: catching the fish, preparing the fish for smoking, the smoking process itself, and finally, preparing the smoked fish for sale. The process is a complex one, which requires much time to complete.
In the initial stages, the fish caught using fishing nets and boats are taken to the port. The fish are then frozen in special containers to keep them fresh. Subsequent to this, the fish are defrosted in fresh water after which they then undergo preparation which usually includes cleaning, gutting, and sometimes filleting. This step ensures that the fish are free from any unwanted parts and are ready for further processing.
The next stage of the process begins when the fish are left in a container with salt water and yellow coloring to enhance the flavor and visual appeal of the fish. Following this, the fish are subjected to the smoking process. Once smoked, the fish can then be packaged before being frozen again at a temperature of 0 degrees Celsius. The packages are then kept in a larger cold storage before being distributed to fishshops.
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Computers, games and films in the class fosters active learning by providing students with a great number of educational tools, software and visual information. In contrast to students who learn different concepts merely from books where all the information is given in the form of a text and some illustrations, pictures, students learning through computers and films are exposed to multimedia content, simulations and visual experiments. With the help of these interactive activities students can gain a better understanding of abstract ideas more efficiently. One example can be a film ‘Interstellar’ which can be played in science classes to cover the concepts of black hole, worm-holes, tidal effects and time dilation. Upon watching films students can be encouraged to discuss those concepts in pairs, in groups and as a whole class, making their learning experience more enjoyable and impactful.
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The bar chart compares people using mobile phones according to age groups in one country from 1998 to 2000. Overall, people from 31-50, and especially those between 16 – 30 were the primary user demographic in all years despite a noticeable fall in the figures. In contrast, there was an increase in the proportion of phone users in the youngest and the oldest age groups.
There were considerable variations in the phone usage patterns among the two youngest age groups. In 1998, only 2% of those aged less than 15 owned mobile phones while 53% of people from the 16-30 age bracket used such devices. This discrepancy, however, narrowed down over the next years, as the figure for the under-15 group rose to 8%, whereas the 16-30 age bracket saw a decline to 45% in 1999. In the final year, there was a marginal one-percentage-point change in both numbers, with the respective figures of people aged under 15 and those from the 16-30 age bracket standing at 9% and 44%
A similar scenario was observed in the remaining two age groups. Mobile phone users comprised 41% of the 31-50 age category, a figure that then dropped by 2-percentage points in each subsequent year, finishing at 37% in 2000. Meanwhile, the figure trended upward for the oldest age group. Starting at just 4% in 1998, it then doubled in 1999 before increasing further to 10% in 2000.
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One of the most common topics in task 1 is ‘age’
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It is common to see celebrities expressing their opinions on matters that are not directly linked with their expertise. While this can help raise awareness of some important issues, I believe this development is a negative one, as their message can be misleading and they may also oversimplify complex issues.
Famous people talking about social matters can help raise awareness of a problem. As they often have a huge following and influence, their message can reach millions, if not billions, of people. This can ensure that a necessary course of action is taken to deal with the problem faster than when a politician talks about the same issue. For example, the deforestation of Amazon rainforests has long been neglected by government bodies until celebrities such as Leonardo Di Caprio – an Oscar winning actor – took interest in the issue. With his influence, he drew public attention to the problem, saving millions of acres of land as a result.
Except such cases, celebrities discussing problems that are not related to their profession is a negative development. One major concern is they may mislead the public. Usually when people idolize a particular celebrity, they tend to believe what they say without ever questioning their credibility. This can even encourage the public to ignore reliable sources, which may prevent them from reaching sensible conclusions. During the COVID-19 pandemic, for instance, many celebrities spoke against vaccines, which somewhat led their followers to reject vaccines even though multiple organizations emphasized the benefits of such preventive measures.
Moreover, when celebrities voice their opinions on matters they do not fully understand, this may lead to the oversimplified portrayal of those issues. As they usually lack in-depth knowledge of the situation, they may contribute to the spread of misinformation and misunderstanding among the public. For example, many celebrities often criticize governments for ignoring some pressing issues such as housing shortages, without recognizing the intricacies involved in finding solutions. Housing shortages are not simply solved by providing houses; numerous factors such as urban planning, infrastructure, and economic policies play crucial roles. Consequently, their followers may fail to grasp the full complexity of the problem, resulting in a limited understanding of the issue at hand.
In conclusion, in some cases, celebrities can help solve problems by informing people on a larger scale than government bodies ever could. However, this does not necessarily mean that they should express their opinions on public issues because this can lead to confusion among the public. Therefore, I believe this is an undesirable change.
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Whether or not someone achieves their aims is mostly by a question of luck.
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School should use films, computers, and games instead of books.
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The bar chart compares the ages when women had their first child in Australia from 1966 to 2006. Overall, there was a growing trend of later parenthood. While there was a sharp drop in the proportion of women who gave birth at the age of 19 and 20-24, an opposite trend was observed among women aged between 30 and over 40s, with the biggest rises seen among women in their 30s. By contrast, after an initial increase in the percentage of women who decided to have a baby in their late 20s, the figure fell in 2006.
In 1966, an overwhelming majority of women leaned towards earlier parenthood with over 60% falling within the 20-24 age bracket. However, this percentage saw a 20-point fall by 1986, further dropping to 30% in 2006. 25-29 was the second most common age for Australian women to give birth in 1966, with little under 40% of them choosing this age to be the most appropriate. After this, despite a considerable rise to over 50% in 1986, the percentage dropped to around 40% in 2006. Similar to women in 20-25 age bracket, those aged under 19 experienced a fall in numbers over the years from an initial 35% to around 21% in 1986 before finishing at a mere 11%.
The remaining age categories, however, experienced consistent rises in their figures. Women in the 30 to 34 and 35 to 39 age groups followed a similar trajectory, with their respective figures standing at 12% and 9% in 1966 and increasing to around 19% and 15% in 1986. After two decades, they maintained their trajectory as the proportion of women giving birth in their early 30s reached a staggering 50% and those from the 35-39 age bracket doubled. Women who gave birth to their firstborns after the age of 40, on the other hand, showed a modest 2% in 1966, a figure, which slowly went up to 4% in 1986, finishing at 5% in 2006.
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A list of the most serious mistakes students make in each criterion Task 1:
1️⃣Task achievement:
Including incorrect detail in the overview
Example: if a category didn’t fluctuate and you say it fluctuated, your Task Achievement score will be 5.
2️⃣Coherence and cohesion:
Not being able to divide information logically into body paragraphs.
Example: if there are 4 categories, you shouldnt randomly pick 2 categories in one paragraph and the other in the next. There must be a logic behind how you select information. Not being able to do this usually limits your CC score to 6.0
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What other problems do you face in task 1?
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Film stars and celebrities often share their views on public matters that have little to do with their profession.
Is this a positive or negative development?
As a fellow human being who’s been learning things for some time, I can assure you that you need a genuine emotional connection with what you are learning to learn it most effectively.
Fall in love with what you learn and you’ll learn it in no time.
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